Poems

[D-Soul]

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hey all i got some poems that i wanted to write up here so yeah if your interest post them up here, so ill start it off

well i got 2 poems well one is more of a blog which i wrote while i was bored in maths class and the other is which i wrote a long time ago, i think yr9

We stand alone on a journey to achieve the greatest,
we believe that only god can judge us at the times where
we feel the most pain, but when it comes to criticizing and
judging other people the whole world is avaliable.
Why are we so shallow that when were down and out we
yearn for help from another being but when we happy its
because of materialist objects. We are constantly overwhelmed by human
natures envious ways to achieve nothing but absolute power that we
annihilate ourselves, we should embrace whats lefts of us and
continue to march towards the holy land.. our purpose on earth...




i want to rise not fall
i want to give my all

i want to be the best man
i want to see all perplexed lives and understand

i want to reach my horizon and expand them
to far beyond and never stop
i want to see many lives prosper
not suffer


i want to soar in to my conscience
n reminiscence the good not bad
i want all i cannot have

i want my life to be as clam as a breeze
but as exciting as a wild storm
i want love to make me feel week in the knees
but id hate since i was born..


so keep posting your poems up here and be sure to leave feed back, peace

[PrettyVacant]

Um. Nice poem.

[im ur bob]

i found this peom and it really moved me.....ive been writing poems since i could hold a pencil and i kno a gud 1 wen i see it....well here it is

"Misty"

My name is Misty
I'm only three,
My eyes are swollen
I cannot see,

I must be stupid
I must be bad,
What else could have
Made my daddy so mad?

I wish I were better
I wish I weren't ugly,
Then maybe my mommy
Would still want to hug me.

I can't speak at all
I can't do a wrong
Or else I'm locked up
All the day long.

When I awake
I'm all alone
The house is dark
My folks aren't home.

When my mommy does come
I'll try and be nice,
So maybe I'll get just
One whipping tonight.

Don't make a sound!
I just heard a car
My daddy is back
From Charlie's Bar.

I hear him curse,
My name he calls,
I press myself
Against the wall.

I try and hide
From his evil eyes,
I'm so afraid now
I'm starting to cry.

He finds me weeping,
He shouts ugly words,
He says its my fault
That he suffers at work.

He slaps me and hits me
And yells at me more,
I finally get free
And I run for the door.

He's already locked it
And I start to bawl,
He takes me and throws me
Against the hard wall.

I fall to the floor
With my bones nearly broken,
And my daddy continues
With more bad words spoken.

"I'm sorry!", I scream,
But its much too late.
His face has been twisted
Into unimaginable hate.

The hurt and the pain
Again and again.
Oh please God, have mercy!
Oh please let it end!

And he finally stops
And heads for the door,
While I lay there motionless
Sprawled on the floor.

My name is Misty
And I am but three,
Tonight my daddy
Murdered me.

[Tulipa]

Wow.

Those are both ... okay to be honest?

Emotional crap.

[nichhhole]

Originally Posted by im ur bob

i found this peom and it really moved me.....ive been writing poems since i could hold a pencil and i kno a gud 1 wen i see it....well here it is

"Misty"

My name is Misty
I'm only three,
My eyes are swollen
I cannot see,

I must be stupid
I must be bad,
What else could have
Made my daddy so mad?


I can't speak at all
I can't do a wrong
Or else I'm locked up
All the day long.

When I awake
I'm all alone
The house is dark
My folks aren't home.

.

So... rhyming constitutes a 'good' poem?
then... 'i'm a poet and i didnt even know it!'

I don't particularly think this poem is very good at all... it's one of those pathetic chain email type things.

if you like this then perhaps check out the one that goes...
'johnny brought a gun to school, to show his friends that it was cool' blah blah.
i used to like that stuff back in year 8..
have a look at www.forwardgarden.com

[Tulipa]

There are much better poetry websites out there besides www.forwardgarden.com

[Sgs2006]

i got 1 to, you faggot

here it is, fag

Tree Jawlyrics
Lock youupthrowawaythekeysoonerthanthey'll
set youfreeneveradmittheywerewrong,that's right Idon't
care whatyoupay
there's no justiceintheUSApeoplediewitha
trial tonightwhydoyoujusthesitateriseonupandsmashthestate
free yourmindthrowdownyourchainIcanseeonlyonesolutionpeople
unite inarevolutionneverlettheirmoneyruleagainsneakattackatmy
back Ifeelthefla
k asyoulackIseerightthroughyoubutanywayinevery
way you're the same sneak attack at my back I feel the flak as you lack I see
right throughyoubutanyway-ineveryway-Ihavetowatchyouallplaythegame
yeah feelthepaini
n yourbrainfeelthestrainit's insane and I feel the same
but anywayineverywaymeditatefeelthepaininyourbrainfeelthestrainit's insane
and Ifeelthesamebutanywayineverywaypeoplewatchandlaughatmydismay, yeah

[S M i L E]

I ask you
Ask yourself why
When no reasons come
I break down and cry
I scream and tell you
It’s not your problem
That I’m in control
But that is all lies
I say that it’s over
All my hope is gone
Please don’t let me
Fight this alone
Did you hear the news
About that young girl
They said she was 16
When it took her life away
And you ask me now
Ask myself why
Because hell
Look at what I’m doing to myself
To those who love me
I asked you if it would end
And now it has
I’ve fallen now
I’m out of reach
Goodbye me friend
Sweet dreams tonight
Don’t let me be forgotten
I can hear someone crying
Is that you my beautiful friend?

[Tulipa]

Boring!

Imagery and verbs make a poem. That's just dull, angsty prose shoved into line breaks.

[Tulipa]

Overly angsty and cliched as well as feeling very hollow and empty. Doesn't feel real basically.

[.ShAkEdOwN.]

Originally Posted by Tulipa

Overly angsty and cliched as well as feeling very hollow and empty. Doesn't feel real basically.

do you write poems?
if you are so good at criticizing others
you must write somethings yourself
can u post something here for me to see?

[Tulipa]

Originally Posted by .ShAkEdOwN.

do you write poems?
if you are so good at criticizing others
you must write somethings yourself
can u post something here for me to see?

Um, yup I do. I'm a creative writing major and I also do a lot of editing for EE2 kiddies and various other colleagues.

I'll find something to post but I'm not the biggest for posting my own work around because I'm consistently editing it and like any writer I worry about plagiarism.

[.ShAkEdOwN.]

Originally Posted by Tulipa

Um, yup I do. I'm a creative writing major and I also do a lot of editing for EE2 kiddies and various other colleagues.

I'll find something to post but I'm not the biggest for posting my own work around because I'm consistently editing it and like any writer I worry about plagiarism.

well cool i wanna read at least a little bit of something.

yes i know what you mean.. you don't want your work to end up on forwardgarden or some other crappy website where it becomes or overused and annoying.

cant wait till you're famous

[Tulipa]

Haha firstly I post on various websites that are much more reputable than forwardgarden and my work is copyrighted.

And secondly, I'm planning on being an editor at the moment instead of a published writer. It's virtually impossible to achieve and I'd prefer critical success instead of commercial success. Thus I won't be famous.

Would you mind if I pmed it or something like that? I don't particularly want to post it here.

[.ShAkEdOwN.]

Originally Posted by Tulipa

Haha firstly I post on various websites that are much more reputable than forwardgarden and my work is copyrighted.

And secondly, I'm planning on being an editor at the moment instead of a published writer. It's virtually impossible to achieve and I'd prefer critical success instead of commercial success. Thus I won't be famous.

Would you mind if I pmed it or something like that? I don't particularly want to post it here.

yeh sure