[jetblack2007]

Yeah i have to agree. I think one big thing is imagery. One thing which really satisfies me when writing a poem is a masterful use of imagery. I think its abit too literal.

And the cliche thing is right. When i started reading i thought to myself 'no not again'. That concept is fine, but find another way to describe it. Maybe use a conceit?

And Oscar Wilde said "A poet can survive everything but a misprint". Just look over the work before you finalise it, because bad grammar and punctuation is when people start to judge. I know its hard to look over my texts a second time – i dont know why, but i realised i need to because we always miss something.

I hope that helped.