BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works

**Rafy** · 28 Aug 2009, 7:30 PM

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jess39 · 28 Aug 2009, 7:55 PM

I'll start, shall I?

Title: The Tale of Shortbread Sophie and Kilometrico Kid or, There Are No Woods Around Here
Medium: Short story

*gulp*

accio.brain · 28 Aug 2009, 8:50 PM

Only up to pg 12 of your story and I absolutely love it. Can't wait to get to the end!

jess39 · 28 Aug 2009, 8:56 PM

Aw, thanks!

I just read over it again and found a few things I could have changed. Argh.

Post yours up! I feel stupid being the only one who has posted so far.

xsavagex · 28 Aug 2009, 9:12 PM

I've started reading yours and its awesome

Other people should post! I like reading them

marcquelle · 28 Aug 2009, 9:14 PM

Here is mine

Medium: Radio Drama
Title: Vampires + Bees = Comedy?

if you would like to hear the sound file please pm and i'll be glad to email as i cannot upload anywhere for some unknown reason lols

accio.brain · 28 Aug 2009, 9:57 PM

Jess: finished reading! it's really good

I love Jasper's letters and the way he speaks, and how you've described certain things like when he was thrown down the stairs and her 'fairy floss' hair! I love Claire's weirdness too, lol. Don't want to ruin it for anyone, though I half expected someone to die in the end or for Claire to not be real. Is there actually something wrong with Sophie or is she just kind of... odd, herself? Also really like your title, it's very.. poetic? fairytale-ish? Not sure of the word. I expect you to get a rather high mark, mmk?

Ack, I don't wanna post mine just yet... It was hard leaving it in the hands of my teacher this morning! might just wait and see...

xsavagex · 28 Aug 2009, 10:04 PM

^Please post it

jess39 · 28 Aug 2009, 10:17 PM

marcquelle, good work! It was really funny.

accio.brain, thank you so much. It was never my intention for anyone to die. I think that would have been a little too overdramatic. Someone else remarked that they thought Claire would be a figment of Jasper's imagination. I was really happy to hear that. It's kind of the point of her character.

(It's all explained in the RS.) And... Sophie. Well. There's nothing strictly wrong with her. She's just a terrible parent, pretty much. She probably wasn't ready for motherhood when Jasper and Hollie were born, and then Jasper wasn't 'normal' and she found it extremely hard to cope, because she wanted always wanted a perfect life like the 'sparkle women'. Yeah... I hope that makes sense! I could tell you so much about these characters that doesn't fit within the limits of the 6000-8000 word MW or the 1500 word RS, haha.

And I agree, you should post yours! But when you're ready, of course.

xsavagex · 28 Aug 2009, 10:49 PM

I thought someone was going to die too!

i haven't read your RS so i have no idea where you got your influences from or whatever but it kinda reminded me of "We Need To Talk About Kevin" if you've read it?

Not in a copying kind of way but just reminded me of that book.

diametric · 28 Aug 2009, 10:52 PM

Here goes nothing --

Be critical. I'm a bit bored tonight, so I'll get around to reading your guy's works as well.

Sorry, forgot title and medium, ack:

Title: Paradise Lost?
Medium: Short Story

marcquelle · 28 Aug 2009, 11:03 PM

DIAMETRIC: i love it espoecially the ending

"The ice cracks beneath me. Splitting asunder, the water it embraces me. My feet are the first
to go, their ethereal flame now steam in the wind. What power was this, and why, why had I
never once been more… alive? Inviting a shower of drizzle, the flame it hisses, and it spits.
We are merely elements and to each other we return. The lake takes me into its icy depths,
and for a few fleeting moments, it seems as though the inferno would vaporise each drop, but
then it is quieted… I am gone."

its fantastic. If i could by it as a novella i would

5233andy · 28 Aug 2009, 11:23 PM

I would post mine, though, I've just discovered mistakes in the final copy...

marcquelle · 28 Aug 2009, 11:27 PM

don't worry i just found one that has really annoyed me (in the recording), oh well part and parcel of the course and proofreading.

5233andy · 28 Aug 2009, 11:33 PM

Oh, mine's so bad that it simply blows a hole in it - the first mistake occurred in the second line!!

28 Aug 2009, 7:30 PM	#1 (permalink)
Rafy Super Moderator HSC: 2005 Gender: Male Join Date: Sep 2004 Posts: 5,962 Last Activity: Today, 1:49 AM	BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works You can hide this advertisement by registering. Post up your MW's and Reflection Statements here! When submitting your Major Work in this thread, please let us know the medium you have chosen and the title of your work.

28 Aug 2009, 8:50 PM	#3 (permalink)
accio.brain Assistant Member HSC: 2009 Gender: Female Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 80 Last Activity: 10 Nov 2009, 4:16 PM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works Only up to pg 12 of your story and I absolutely love it. Can't wait to get to the end! __________________ - English Ad - English Ext1 - English Ext2 - Maths 3U - Legal Studies - Modern History -

28 Aug 2009, 8:56 PM	#4 (permalink)
jess39 Member HSC: 2009 Gender: Female Location: Sydney Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 106 Last Activity: 10 Nov 2009, 2:43 PM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works Aw, thanks! I just read over it again and found a few things I could have changed. Argh. Post yours up! I feel stupid being the only one who has posted so far.

28 Aug 2009, 9:12 PM	#5 (permalink)
xsavagex Senior Member HSC: 2007 Gender: Female Location: Sydney Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 221 Last Activity: 28 Oct 2009, 6:56 PM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works I've started reading yours and its awesome Other people should post! I like reading them __________________ 2008: B Business Studies @ CSU Bathurst! 2009: B Commerce (Marketing + Organisational Behaviour) @ Macquarie

28 Aug 2009, 9:57 PM	#7 (permalink)
accio.brain Assistant Member HSC: 2009 Gender: Female Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 80 Last Activity: 10 Nov 2009, 4:16 PM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works Jess: finished reading! it's really good I love Jasper's letters and the way he speaks, and how you've described certain things like when he was thrown down the stairs and her 'fairy floss' hair! I love Claire's weirdness too, lol. Don't want to ruin it for anyone, though I half expected someone to die in the end or for Claire to not be real. Is there actually something wrong with Sophie or is she just kind of... odd, herself? Also really like your title, it's very.. poetic? fairytale-ish? Not sure of the word. I expect you to get a rather high mark, mmk? Ack, I don't wanna post mine just yet... It was hard leaving it in the hands of my teacher this morning! might just wait and see... __________________ - English Ad - English Ext1 - English Ext2 - Maths 3U - Legal Studies - Modern History -

28 Aug 2009, 10:04 PM	#8 (permalink)
xsavagex Senior Member HSC: 2007 Gender: Female Location: Sydney Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 221 Last Activity: 28 Oct 2009, 6:56 PM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works ^Please post it __________________ 2008: B Business Studies @ CSU Bathurst! 2009: B Commerce (Marketing + Organisational Behaviour) @ Macquarie

28 Aug 2009, 10:17 PM	#9 (permalink)
jess39 Member HSC: 2009 Gender: Female Location: Sydney Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 106 Last Activity: 10 Nov 2009, 2:43 PM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works marcquelle, good work! It was really funny. accio.brain, thank you so much. It was never my intention for anyone to die. I think that would have been a little too overdramatic. Someone else remarked that they thought Claire would be a figment of Jasper's imagination. I was really happy to hear that. It's kind of the point of her character. (It's all explained in the RS.) And... Sophie. Well. There's nothing strictly wrong with her. She's just a terrible parent, pretty much. She probably wasn't ready for motherhood when Jasper and Hollie were born, and then Jasper wasn't 'normal' and she found it extremely hard to cope, because she wanted always wanted a perfect life like the 'sparkle women'. Yeah... I hope that makes sense! I could tell you so much about these characters that doesn't fit within the limits of the 6000-8000 word MW or the 1500 word RS, haha. And I agree, you should post yours! But when you're ready, of course.

28 Aug 2009, 10:49 PM	#10 (permalink)
xsavagex Senior Member HSC: 2007 Gender: Female Location: Sydney Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 221 Last Activity: 28 Oct 2009, 6:56 PM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works I thought someone was going to die too! i haven't read your RS so i have no idea where you got your influences from or whatever but it kinda reminded me of "We Need To Talk About Kevin" if you've read it? Not in a copying kind of way but just reminded me of that book. __________________ 2008: B Business Studies @ CSU Bathurst! 2009: B Commerce (Marketing + Organisational Behaviour) @ Macquarie

28 Aug 2009, 11:03 PM	#12 (permalink)
marcquelle a.k.a. Michael...Hi! HSC: 2009 Gender: Male Location: Jervis Bay, N.S.W. Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 1,455 Last Activity: 20 Nov 2009, 6:36 PM Blog Entries: 1	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works DIAMETRIC: i love it espoecially the ending "The ice cracks beneath me. Splitting asunder, the water it embraces me. My feet are the first to go, their ethereal flame now steam in the wind. What power was this, and why, why had I never once been more… alive? Inviting a shower of drizzle, the flame it hisses, and it spits. We are merely elements and to each other we return. The lake takes me into its icy depths, and for a few fleeting moments, it seems as though the inferno would vaporise each drop, but then it is quieted… I am gone." its fantastic. If i could by it as a novella i would __________________ 2010: UoW B. Nursing

28 Aug 2009, 11:23 PM	#13 (permalink)
5233andy Senior Member HSC: 2009 Gender: Male Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 362 Last Activity: Today, 1:39 AM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works I would post mine, though, I've just discovered mistakes in the final copy...

28 Aug 2009, 11:27 PM	#14 (permalink)
marcquelle a.k.a. Michael...Hi! HSC: 2009 Gender: Male Location: Jervis Bay, N.S.W. Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 1,455 Last Activity: 20 Nov 2009, 6:36 PM Blog Entries: 1	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works don't worry i just found one that has really annoyed me (in the recording), oh well part and parcel of the course and proofreading. __________________ 2010: UoW B. Nursing

28 Aug 2009, 11:33 PM	#15 (permalink)
5233andy Senior Member HSC: 2009 Gender: Male Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 362 Last Activity: Today, 1:39 AM	Re: BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works Oh, mine's so bad that it simply blows a hole in it - the first mistake occurred in the second line!!

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