Remember your SEXY paragraphs!

[ballerinabarbie]

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it seems simple - but if you don't have structure then no matter how good your points are you aren't going to get a band 6 for your essay

structure your paragraphs like this:

S- statement/topic sentence
E- evidence
X- explanation
Y- why? why did you include this point - link back to the question

OR

P- point
E- evidence
A- analysis
L- link

good luck guys!

[Hotdog]

I have a problem where I wrong LOOOOOG long paragraphs that spans longer than a page sometimes because I try to link heaps of stuff together under one sub point, along with quotes and that. Do you think this is alright?

[DebuOfCourse]

What do you mean by evidence and what do you mean by example?

I might be interpreting it all wrong, but I was ALWAYS under the impression that you have evidence to back up your example, in which case you'd have example and THEN evidence. Of course, looking at it in a different way is even more confusing because then I can't see what the difference is between an example and evidence. Isn't an example evidence? Example of what?

[dandaman]

Statement: Roy is like a rock
Evidence: He is solid and unfriendly.
Example: He told Kate to piss off.
Why: because he had a small penis

i think thats the general idea

[Mazey]

*sigh* Our teacher told us that... never got the difference between evidence and example cos the example's kinda the evidence isnt it?

[ballerinabarbie]

Originally posted by Mazey
*sigh* Our teacher told us that... never got the difference between evidence and example cos the example's kinda the evidence isnt it?

well maybe think of evidence as expanding on your topic sentence, and then example as an example of where this is shown in your text (eg. with a quote, or refering to a particular scene etc.)

[ballerinabarbie]

ok now you people are all just twisting what i say!! ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

explanation is an analysis of your example... the y is linking it back to the question... eg. Through Peter Brooks production we see that King Lear supports power structures (that was totally made up... don't use that!! hahah)

[Gregor Samsa]

Originally posted by ballerinabarbie
well maybe think of evidence as expanding on your topic sentence, and then example as an example of where this is shown in your text (eg. with a quote, or refering to a particular scene etc.)

Yeah.. This is the way my class got taught that system.

-What's Your Point? (Topic sentence)
-Please Explain (Expand upon point.)
-Show Me The Money (Evidence)
-But Why? (Significance/Analysis)

It's a good paragraph paradigm. (y)

[juggernaut]

this couldve already been argued.. but shouldnt an explanation of the point be BEFORE the example?

thats how i always wrote
raise it, explain it, give an example to support it, then link it back

[ashwin]

I reckon SEPL is better -

S - state ur topic sentance
E - explain ur argument
P - prove ur argument with reference to the text
L - link this back to the essay question

[Ziff]

Topic Question: "What would be an effective way to implement the Kyoto Protocol?"

Raise the Point
- "Cows need to be culled."

Explain the Point
- "Cows create greenhouse gasses."

Support the Point
- "The average cow produces 1,000 tonnes of CO2 per year."

Link the point to the Question
- "An effective way of reducing greenhouse gasses in Australia would be to cull cows."

[herdigerdi]

ok i can see you guys are getting all confused. i reckon you've gotta state your topic sentance. then the evidence/example as you need to "show close links to the text" but the evidence is a qoute right and the example is maybe in a visual text where the colours, red and orange are used to symbolise life... yeah? so the evidence and example are the same thing but different for each text. and then after all that you have to answer "SO WHAT??" that is - why have you just written all this crap? so then go back to the question and say WHY!

[glitterfairy]

Hmm... looking at these, they're all perfectly useable, but for those getting confused, a good idea is to make sure that you DON'T NEED TO ALWAYS FOLLOW THESE RULES. So long as you say something and have your evidence to make it valid and link back to the question, you're fine- no matter how you do it Although if you do have a lot of trouble with structuring your essay paragraphs, using things like 'SEE' or 'SEXY' are perfectly fine lol.

Best wishes!

[Dumsum]

We were taught PEER:

P - Point. Make your point.
E - Example. Provide an example.
E - Elaborate. Explain the effect.
R - Relate. Link back to question.

I think the evidence and explanation can be intertwined as one sentace/section really. Often I'll state my point of view and then show evidence/example to back up my point of view, however other times I'll state the example and then explain what it represents and why it is relevant. Neither way is wrong.