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I thought it was very good.

Imagery/description - definitely an A.
Narrative - probably a B or a B+. You've identified this yourself, but nothing really happens. But I do understand what you're trying to do.

Which means 12 (maybe 13) out of 15, in my opinion. Well done.
 

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i liked it

id say 14/15

how many pages ?

btw: i wrote about hiroshima also! :D
 
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I thought it was very good.

Imagery/description - definitely an A.
Narrative - probably a B or a B+. You've identified this yourself, but nothing really happens. But I do understand what you're trying to do.

Which means 12 (maybe 13) out of 15, in my opinion. Well done.
Wow, thank you! I always average around 9 for my other creatives.
 

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i liked it

id say 14/15

how many pages ?

btw: i wrote about hiroshima also! :D
Hi :) Thats very generous! Um, my writing is very big so I think around 3? I can't really remember to be honest.
What was your story about? :D
 

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Hi :) Thats very generous! Um, my writing is very big so I think around 3? I can't really remember to be honest.
What was your story about? :D
3 booklets or pages?

but if aerath says urs is alright then i shud be fine

mine was about an elderly man reflecting on Hiroshima Pre-1945 (1940) and how it formed the framework for his rel. with his wife

through metaphors and imagery i attempt to show a deep connection between his identity and hiroshima and whoe after the bombing he feels lost

his memory of a beautiful landscape has been replaced by anguish and sorrow

also, the photograph wasnt enough to capture its beauty

etc etc (cant remember all)

my original idea didnt fit in at all so i made this 1 up on the spot
 
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3 booklets or pages?

but if aerath says urs is alright then i shud be fine

mine was about an elderly man reflecting on Hiroshima Pre-1945 (1940) and how it formed the framework for his rel. with his wife

through metaphors and imagery i attempt to show a deep connection between his identity and hiroshima and whoe after the bombing he feels lost

his memory of a beautiful landscape has been replaced by anguish and sorrow

also, the photograph wasnt enough to capture its beauty

etc etc (cant remember all)

my original idea didnt fit in at all so i made this 1 up on the spot
Um 3 pages :) I think its around 700 or 800 words only~
wow, you made that up on the spot?! gifted!
im sooo lucky my creative fitted straight in!
 

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Um 3 pages :) I think its around 700 or 800 words only~
wow, you made that up on the spot?! gifted!
im sooo lucky my creative fitted straight in!
mine was 3 pages too (i was worried it wasnt enough)

wow how do u fit 800 words on 3 pages?

how many words per line?
 

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but if aerath says urs is alright then i shud be fine
Thanks, but can I just say, that I'm not a teacher or anything - anything I say, or any advice I give should not be taken as a substitute for a qualified teacher. :) I'm just a student (albeit a little bit older than most of you guys), with no teaching/marking qualifications whatsoever.
 

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Thanks, but can I just say, that I'm not a teacher or anything - anything I say, or any advice I give should not be taken as a substitute for a qualified teacher. :) I'm just a student (albeit a little bit older than most of you guys), with no teaching/marking qualifications whatsoever.
gotta have faith man

gotta have faith
 

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yeah thats about right

mine was like.. 5 - 7 words

so roughly 400 - 500
 

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yeah thats about right

mine was like.. 5 - 7 words

so roughly 400 - 500
Yeh, thats good. My teacher said it was best to keep creatives under 800, (unless it was some crazy sophisticated shit) or else the marker would get bored very, very quickly
 

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I liked it overall. At times the nature imagery got a bit too flowery (no pun intended) for me and seemed a little forced, but it had a nice flow and seemed well-connected. The plot was a bit unclear, but it was nice to read and, to me, the images were very clear, which worked well. 13?
 

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I liked it overall. At times the nature imagery got a bit too flowery (no pun intended) for me and seemed a little forced, but it had a nice flow and seemed well-connected. The plot was a bit unclear, but it was nice to read and, to me, the images were very clear, which worked well. 13?
Thankyou very much :)
 

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