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[holden4ever89]

Hey, just wondering if

any poets willing to post some opening lines or maybe even an opening poem??

I started reflection statementing today

YAYA!!
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[ellen.louise]

Georgie had a car,
A little car that went.
It had three scratches in the roof,
And in the side a dent.


EDIT: ha this is the EE2 forum...

children's poetry a little innappropriate.

 

[holden4ever89]

haha YES!! childrens poetry all the way lol. In fact my opening quote is rather similar:

"All the council signs
and all the council men
couldn't put her
together again"​

Opening poem:

"though lust​

prepares us for savagery,​

it will never prepare us for​

life.​

​

the bastard child​

of impulse and wish."​

 

[ellen.louise]

haha YES!! childrens poetry all the way lol. In fact my opening quote is rather similar:

"All the council signs
and all the council men
couldn't put her
together again"​

Opening poem:

"though lust
prepares us for savagery,
it will never prepare us for
life.

the bastard child
of impulse and wish."​

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dramatic.
what's the rest of it about?

 

[holden4ever89]

haha, yes "dramatic"...."dramatically poor writing" i think is the correct term

but basically its about two people that hook up, form one massively intense relationship, power struggle occurs, then they die in a car accident

each poem is a roadsign, well based on a road sign if that makes sense

pretty much an excuse for me to write about cars

if you tell me yours is childrens poetry throughout i will marry you right now

yes...boredofstudies first marriage!! honeymoon is AFTER the hsc of course

 

[Helpme!!!!!!!]

lol! can i come to your wedding!

"Who needs a monotone?
When the world is,
Vibrant!
Brimming with hues,
Stretching beyond description"

It sounds really lame out of context tho!

 

[ellen.louise]

haha, yes "dramatic"...."dramatically poor writing" i think is the correct term

but basically its about two people that hook up, form one massively intense relationship, power struggle occurs, then they die in a car accident

each poem is a roadsign, well based on a road sign if that makes sense

pretty much an excuse for me to write about cars

if you tell me yours is childrens poetry throughout i will marry you right now

yes...boredofstudies first marriage!! honeymoon is AFTER the hsc of course

haha that's as far as I got.
there are big big plans for it to be children's poetry throughout though.

Damn I wish I could draw...

 

[ZJ NingNing]

Ellen, get on MSN now