can sumone read my essay plz? (1 Viewer)

[>monkey<]

hey everyone ..i got this essay due first day back n its 15% so id like to do really well in it ...can sumone please be kind enough to read thru it n lemme kno wat they think??
thanx heaps...really appreaciated
by d way my set text is on giants shoulders

 

[absolution*]

Reads well. Not enough on your supp's and too much on OGS. Also, if your planning to use this in the hsc its a little long unless you write realllly fast.

 

[>monkey<]

yeah everyone says its a lil long hmm ...is my intro alrite?? im a bit worried about that part

 

[absolution*]

I cant really be bothered opening it up again but from what i read the intro was fine.

 

[*sarah*]

I havent actually done those texts but your intro sounds good. Maybe a bit long though. Yep if it was the HSC you seriously wouldnt want to attempt to write more than 3 typed pages worth. My limit was only 2 and a bit, but everyone is different

 

[>monkey<]

yeah i get ya ...i tend to write a lot wen its a hand in task but im different in exams lol .....so how was the rest of it?