kevinx2
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Real good of you -tal- for going to so much effort to help *thumbs up*
I read a bit more of your draft, not all of it sorry
it's looking good except with your tenses, you switch between past and present tense quite a lot. I'm having the same problem as well, and im fixing it right now
Again GoodLuckies![Smile :) :)](data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7)
I read a bit more of your draft, not all of it sorry
Again GoodLuckies