Journeys Are Double Sided (1 Viewer)

[danthor]

Hey guys I have just Handed this in as a Major Assessment Task. Have a read and see what you think, Any feed back would be great. The question was "Journeys are double sided" Write an exposition.

 

[Riviet]

I think you have made a genuine effort. Since the question is very general in asking two sides to journey, you could have talked about anything that is double sided, and you chose positives and negatives which is fine, but to improve, maybe talk about other perspectives of journey where it is doubld sided. But overall, quite good in my opinion.

 

[bobby2004]

feedback.

I would talk about the neutral side of journeys as well. Show the responder that the journey can be 'Double Sided'. Other than that your writing style is excellent!