Hattygirl
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hahahaha u people make me feel soooooo stupid.... im guna fail with flying colours... thanx kiddos
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freaking_out
Saddam's new life
don't worry, i'll prolly b failing as well.
I think you should mention the specific poems you're doing in the intro. But otherwise I think it's quite good.
The Glass Jar - maybe you could mention how the boy feels betrayed (first by the failure of the glass jar and then his mother). The boy does not understand the act of sex and sees it as violent and brutal. With the biblical references, I thought it emphasized the boy's firm belief in the jar. I think you ought to mention how he believes the jar will banish the demons of his nightmares. (You haven't explained about the purpose of the glass jar nor what happened to cause the glass jar to fail.) When you say the boy's world has changed - how?
For In the Park, I think you should be more clear about the changing self. I think 'severely traumatised' is a little too strong. I think you should drop in the word "burden" in there somewhere. The idea that family life holds no rewards for her.
I write a chunk about The Glass Jar and not much else for your other texts. You covered With Arms Wide Open well and I skimmed through Leunig's cartoon and Educating Rita because I'm not that familiar with those.
I doubt you'll fail. You're practising essays and that's really good
The Glass Jar - maybe you could mention how the boy feels betrayed (first by the failure of the glass jar and then his mother). The boy does not understand the act of sex and sees it as violent and brutal. With the biblical references, I thought it emphasized the boy's firm belief in the jar. I think you ought to mention how he believes the jar will banish the demons of his nightmares. (You haven't explained about the purpose of the glass jar nor what happened to cause the glass jar to fail.) When you say the boy's world has changed - how?
For In the Park, I think you should be more clear about the changing self. I think 'severely traumatised' is a little too strong. I think you should drop in the word "burden" in there somewhere. The idea that family life holds no rewards for her.
I write a chunk about The Glass Jar and not much else for your other texts. You covered With Arms Wide Open well and I skimmed through Leunig's cartoon and Educating Rita because I'm not that familiar with those.
I doubt you'll fail. You're practising essays and that's really good
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where are the link paragraphs? NONE