What would you guys give this story out of 15? (2 Viewers)

[jraFTW]

are some of you guys serious?!? only 13/14 out of 15

most of the ppl here to be totally honest are well frankly spoks and go to selective and private schools or are top of their non-selective school.

HSC markers wouldn't be that harsh because they would have to mark works from well not as talented students and this would be an exlemplar.

they would give 15/15.

Overall it is well written, has many techniques and can be easily related to belonging. Therefore there is no other mark you can give it than 15 as it ticks all the criteria.

one thing i might comment on is the excessive use of alliteration lol

 

[wixxy2348]

Is that a bad thing?

Not as long as you contrast the short sentences with longer ones, which you seem to do.
(Only skimmed the story though, will read now).

 

[Empyrean444]

are some of you guys serious?!? only 13/14 out of 15

HSC markers wouldn't be that harsh because they would have to mark works from well not as talented students and this would be an exlemplar.

they would give 15/15.

Overall it is well written, has many techniques and can be easily related to belonging. Therefore there is no other mark you can give it than 15 as it ticks all the criteria.

No, because the non-exemplars would simply get really poor marks. If it fulfils the criteria emboldened, it would get in the "A" range. Look at the marking grid - fufilling all the criteria puts one in a range, but won't necessarily be given full marks.

In addition to basic marker subjectivity, the response would still have to to be quite exceptional to warrant a 15.