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s9a

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guys what would u do if u got a 31.43 atar
 

SadCeliac

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I'm moody so I'm gonna be harsh with my feedback


what even is that first sentence is there a question ur answering?? is this ur thesis? this sounds like the beginning of a discursive
"eliot's poetry is no different" mate this isn't mod c change it
"to reflect his current state of mind" no what is it? was it rlly his current state of mind or was it a preach of the return to the traditionalist past? is this his purpose?
"spirituality and man's connection to himself" --> good.
"thus this statement" WHAT STATEMENT
"to a large extent" don't say this, markers hate it. show that u agree with the statement without outwardly saying it like this, eg Eliot indeed posits that...
"subject matter of spirituality" just say spirituality bruh and also hollow men isn't all abt spirituality its also abt the naturalist intellect and DISILLUSIONMENT WHERE IS UR COMMENTARY ON DISILLUSIONMENT THIS IS ELIOT'S WHOLE PURPOSE!!!
"post-ww2 depression and a lack of hope" first off, u shoulda mentioned context and the 2nd industrial revolution earlier. secondly, what is that lack of hope, hope for what? life fulfilment? material satisfaction? what caused the lack of hope? WW2? DID THE WAR CAUSE THE LACK OF HOPE??? IT WAS A VICTORY BRUH
"depicts a world void of spirituality and connection, suggesting that man is trapped within a hopeless reality." good. by the way. this is disillusionment.
"on the other hand, the more optimistic" i disagree its not optimistic its actually rather critical of towns unfriendly and the anxiety surrounding the achievement of a "satisfactory" life bc the magus questions himself a lot like "were we all led that way for birth or death?"
" the individual is able to transcend the physical constraints of the modern world to find a better purpose. " --> beautiful. more of this.
"approach on critical subject matters change over time." yuck what does this mean. does this mean that his texts are credent? textually integrous? relevant in the contemporary realm?

do better gluten.
THANKS BAE
 

synthesisFR

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No don’t listen to him
also I highly doubt I’d get 99.75 at this point, maths/chem are good (unless I screw up they are 99.95 equiv based on trials) but English and esp physics are a problem rn, and I’ve also been doing way less work than I should’ve lately

tbf I only need an 80 ATAR for my course anyway 😭
Sthu
 

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