Belonging Short Story Idea (1 Viewer)

[Halomoe]

Hey guys. I got a story idea (well 3/4 of an idea) and I need your help completing it: A ghost explains his life, going back in time and showing his life through his own eyes. Throughout the story, the ghost itself begins to feel emotive.
Ghosts past life:
-used to be a perfectionist
-successful businessman
-robotic lifestyle (which he doesn't realise until its too late)
-thinks he belongs
-begins to realize how he isn't belonging into society as he has an argument with his wife one night: wife says that the life they are having together just doesn't make her feel happy. She thinks he is too focused on his career sacrificing 'family time' without a second thought.
-in the same period of time, he is getting a new job opportunity from his managing director (Originally, he was a Financial Accountant and his boss is offereing him the job of Financial Director).
-begins to realize his screw-up of a life
-quits his job and leaves his wife thinking its the right thing to do

I left it there and I need your help to finish it off.
Many thanks in advance

 

[kcqn93]

commits suicide

 

[_blank]

I'm just wondering....but why does he need to be a ghost?

 

[-Lemon-]

Hey guys. I got a story idea (well 3/4 of an idea) and I need your help completing it: A ghost explains his life, going back in time and showing his life through his own eyes. Throughout the story, the ghost itself begins to feel emotive.
Ghosts past life:
-used to be a perfectionist
-successful businessman
-robotic lifestyle (which he doesn't realise until its too late)
-thinks he belongs
-begins to realize how he isn't belonging into society as he has an argument with his wife one night: wife says that the life they are having together just doesn't make her feel happy. She thinks he is too focused on his career sacrificing 'family time' without a second thought.
-in the same period of time, he is getting a new job opportunity from his managing director (Originally, he was a Financial Accountant and his boss is offereing him the job of Financial Director).
-begins to realize his screw-up of a life
-quits his job and leaves his wife thinking its the right thing to do

I left it there and I need your help to finish it off.
Many thanks in advance

God that's awful, 'a ghost excplains his life..', i'd fail it right then and there

 

[Yell0w]

commits suicide

Actually..

The guy returns back home, catches his boss in bed with his wife. In shock, he runs to the bathroom, locks door and lies in the bath tub. And cries. He then proceeds to slits his wrist. Before he finally dies... He curses them and comes back as a ghost.

 

[Hierarchy]

Um...I suggest you don't make your narrative not too melodramatic or emotional.

 

[maplestory]

i dislike the fact that he's a ghost.

an old man reflecting his life maybe?

 

[b00m]

old thread guys, you're too late. The guy failed

 

[thongetsu]

lol, by now he cut himself and came back as a ghost.

 

[darkcounty]

Sounds too reflective. My teacher said too many people do reflective pieces and it is gets a bit cliche. I reckon you could do without the ghost at the beginning and just write the entire thing in present tense.

 

[Rothbard]

I had one about belonging where a guy realised he was phone

but that everyone was phone too

so it worked

 

[ibbi00]

^^ Taxed.