glycerine
so don't even ask me
ok, last one for today.
i just read 'trapped' and while i like the basic premise, i don't think it's as strong as it could be. i think you failed to play around with language enough, which is really my main complaint. it was well written, but it wasn't overly sophisticated and i think that's what will lose you marks. i think you have what is mostly a strong premise, and some of your poems communicate the emotions very well, but i think it could've been stronger if you'd played around with language and structure more.
i just read 'trapped' and while i like the basic premise, i don't think it's as strong as it could be. i think you failed to play around with language enough, which is really my main complaint. it was well written, but it wasn't overly sophisticated and i think that's what will lose you marks. i think you have what is mostly a strong premise, and some of your poems communicate the emotions very well, but i think it could've been stronger if you'd played around with language and structure more.