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You think you do bad?

Well...

I choose the plane picture

But the only reference I made to it was I travelling to Silicon Valley (Like computer place) then I was on the plane writing a story about a Hacker "Rebooting" his ways... Lol... Story within a Story...

Its a story destined to fail because I didnt answer the quetsion...

lol....
 

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This was the worst section for me, I'll be lucky if I end up getting 7/15. I chose that buring farm one and didn't relate anything back to change. If I was able to choose again I would've chosen the plane one. I hope I can make up for it on wednesday :(.
 
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Originally posted by Ms 12
I did the wedding picture one (which I didn't want to do cos I think the majority of people will do that one)
Funnily enough, everyone did the wedding pic... Many of the guys at my school were talking about marrying their GF's after the Test (*Slap Myself*)... lol!

But overall i wrote a short recall of how my wedding night went, ohh no, someone please tell me that a first person count of the night would be alright?> crap. i dont know how i am goin 2 do in this one, i think i screwed up.

Tell me, am i dead?
-> First person telling the story
-> About wedding night... i am getting married
-> Related to photo in that it was taken on th enight and handed to me by a drunk friend... i look at it about halfway through the story, and smile, some shit like that.
 

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My story was so corny. Some kid in floating in the ocean after a plane crash and reflects on what they've lost "in the blink of an eye". Only managed 3 pages, but put in heaps of metaphors and crap, so hopefully that makes up for the length.
 

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it seems the marriage pic is easier ... i used the 10 min reading time to gather my ideas... but i only have 25 mins to do it too..
i wrote abt how the narrator view the ceremony of the wedding differently as proposed from a traditional chinese wedding ( i sorta ignored that the pic had a blonde girl)... and then i go on about how maybe the fashion of the wedding changes through time, but the meaning of it never change...

errr... didn't do much technique in my story... and that gonna cost i think... :/
 

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OMGGGGGG this was seriously the best question ever. I had a story pre-written, and when I saw this question, I nearly jumped out of my seat :D:D:D:D

I wrote my story word for word. Coming home now and reading it, I can't find anything that I left out or jumbled up....

Whether or not you guys think my story's good is a separate issue..... but considering the exam's over I'll post it here and you guys can tell me what you think :)

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Terapais canvas was his only retreat from the outside world he was safe inside his dreamland, cut off from the evil spirits which endlessly tortured him in his daily life. From the moment Terapai locked his door he was happy an overwhelmingly warm and loving feeling of safety swept over him; a glowing-white aura that brought infinite peace to his soul. Everything changed when he was in his fantasy land.

His door was no longer battered and old with a dull brass knob now it became over one hundred feet tall, carved boldly yet elegantly from the side of a huge oak tree; with a shining, oversized cast iron key that took every last ounce of strength in Terapais tiny frame to turn. This was where Terapai came to create to breathe life into the vivid world of colour and splendour that existed within the soul of his mind. With lovingly delicate strokes of his brush, Terapai would bring to life colours which for most people existed only within their wildest dreams. But this was no dream. It was Terapais world and no one could ever take it from him.

The tree extended countless miles upward into the sky - it kissed the heavens above. Here at dizzying altitudes, it was greeted by majestic creatures of flight with wingspans that stretched far beyond those found on Earth this was a world that adhered only to the limitless boundaries of Terapais imagination; it was his world and he loved every living creature within it. Perhaps this love was born from Terapais unrepressed ability to control every aspect of life within his fantasy dimension nothing would ever change here unless he so wished.

There was a time when nothing could ever have disturbed the serenity of Terapais dreamland. Days were filled with endless blue skies, and in the evening millions of stars graced the picturesque night sky. They stood in formation, like an army of guardians watching over Terapai and his fantasy land protecting him from the evil that lurked beyond the boundaries of this parallel universe.

Days of safety were disappearing now an evil presence was seeping into Terapais world, slowly infecting it from the inside out. Beyond the farthest reaches of this magical land, on the other side of the huge oak gateway, evil was amassing strength preparing to engulf Terapais paradise like thick, paralysing smog. This evil spirit was growing at a frightening rate, breeding feverishly like deadly bacteria. Slowly but surely, Terapais world was beginning to feel the effects of the evil presence. Cracks were appearing in the foundations of his paradise the mammoth oak door was no longer a guardian of his secret world. He was no longer safe.

Vines were encompassing the giant oak door. From all sides of the door they emerged, squeezing through the minute cracks; the ominous black digits of a demonic hand. Slowly and methodically they began to choke the life from Terapais fortress. The giant keyhole where the iron key had once sat so assuredly was now too feeling the vines wrath. They squeezed through the keyhole, falling over each other as they gasped for the sickly sweet air that had given life to so many other creatures within Terapais world.

The vines were robbing the tree of its life-force. The deep, animated brown that had breathed such life into the smooth skin of Terapais tree was now fading; withering into a dull and lifeless grey. There was a sudden chill in the air a shiver emanated from the top of Terapais head and travelled down the length of his spine, spilling out through the soles of his feet and dissipating across the floor. The evil presence had infected more than just his paradise now the long, bony fingers of the vines demonic claws were reaching out, so close to getting their poisonous grip upon Terapais tiny hands.

He knew that they were here to finally take him away; this had been a long time coming. They had come to tear him from the world that he had given life to with so many thousands of delicate and brush strokes the world that was his. Terapai saw his dreamland falling to pieces around him - each colour was gradually robbed of its energy, its radiance, its soul. Each stroke of his brush became so much more painful to complete than the one before it Terapai knew that soon, the evil spirits would clutch him too within their mighty grip, and choke every last ounce of life from his exhausted body.

Terapai was unable to find the strength within him to endure the pain any longer. The last stroke of his brush was smeared, like a bloodied and gruelling final blow, across his canvas, across his dreamland. His brush dropped to the floor with a thud - along with it went his heart, his dreams, his soul. The vines took hold of his frail little body, intertwining and contorting it as they tore him from his fantasy world, back through the giant oak door - back to the harsh reality from which he had hidden for so long.

Terapai found himself on his back, staring at the four corners of his bedroom ceiling. These four joins in the plaster were the four corners of what had now become his prison cell. They represented everything he hated about the real world the confinement, the restrictions that this motor neuron disease had forsaken him with.

Far off, Terapai could hear his world calling; pleading with him to return. It needed Terapai as much as he needed it. But it was all gone now; the dreamland was beyond his reach.

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i did the bushfire one. Made it as if i was seeing it in the television, trying to empathise. I thought i was beginning to show a lot of signs for teen angst so i just twisted it and said how it is the images in our minds which change and are therefore more important than saving your family photo album in a bushfire
 

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karnevil: That's a great piece of writing... BTW, what picture was it based on?

I picked the rock climbing picture... As soon as the exam finished, I looked back and asked my friend what he had written about, and it was pretty much the same as mine. Not a good sign... =_=

It was basically about how this guy who loved rock climbing, but hated technology. The story went on about him climbing a cliff, and his friend taking a picture using the phone (the picture in the booklet). He fell, became paralysed (didn't really mention it, but it's supposed to be leg down :/), his friend picked up rock climbing and now, he's a cyber freak browsing the internet while his friend is climbing the cliffs "for him".

>_>

BTW, it was only 4 pages.
 
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i'm not good at creative writing but i did the most creative response i have ever done
 

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Nekkid: I just tacked the bushfire picture in the end of mine somewhere, when Terapai's world was being obliterated. I talked about how the fire raged on, reducing his world to ashes, but the fire in his heart had been flooded by the evil, and he no longer had the strength to put up a fight :D
 

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i did the wedding one :( started off about the wedding, then i was reflecting about how i felt on my cousin wedding day when i was a bridesmaid, trying to understand what i wanted out of life, then it was my wedding day..kinda hard to explain how i did it, but i think i did good in it..hopefully ;)
 

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I used the wedding one. I wrote from the perspective of Murray the red Wiggle as he was looking on at Anthony the yellow Wiggle getting married. He was reflecting back on how much things have changed for "Australia's most successful children's entertainment group." Basically it involved Jeff claiming he was narcileptic and accusing the others of being racist for trying to wake him up; Anthony as a sleaze bag who had several paternity suits against him from young mum groupies etc. It all came to a head at a meeting with the creative directors and turned into a punch-up. So then at the wedding they all had black eyes and injuries.

I wrote it in twenty five minutes so it was really really sucky. Poor time management.
 
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i did the bushfire one, but did it from the perspective of an ambulance driver who went to vietnam and they were all torching villages and he had a conflit of values through his previous career. Eventually, he changed and enjoyed seeing people get burnt. A tad weird i thought
 

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i wrote the wedding one, i did more of a reflection then a story, i just looked at the pic, thought of what everyone would do (have a happy wedding) and just wrote the opposite. i wrote how my wife was cheating on me and that the whole wedding was a facade. the change, of course being me finding out my wife is a whore :p
 

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mine was SO bad - think of the worst scenario you can think of, and that was mine. i was going to relate my ending back to the wedding picture - but did i get to finish?! noooooo...so my story doesn't relate to any of the pictures at all...i'm not even sure if it fucking shows any sort of change!! it's only two pages LONG! ~looks to bash someone up (great stress relief)~

argh - good luck for wednesday lol
 

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lol ruella im so happy to see someone as fuked as i am
 

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This one was really annoying in that the specified what you had to write about which previous years papers hadn't, but I managed to somehow get around doing the rock climbing one and even put some of a story I had thought about of class into it.
 

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Meh i did the "bushfire" one, yet when i looked at the pic in the test i just thought it was a picture of the country, and the smoke were clouds. So i dunno my start was pretty good talking about the country landscape and secluded getaways, but my ending is kinda screwed coz i didnt refer to bushfires, i just wrote how society was dominating every last inch of our natural landscape.
 

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