Can I PM/email anyone my narrative for advise? (2 Viewers)

[-may-cat-]

I had them as a way of breaking up the flashback sort of temporal fragmentation (yes, i said that just to sound pretentious). They aren't essential and if they're not something you put in normally you probably shouldn't keep them, i think the paragraphing works well enough with the blank lines..
But then again, I like them
Really more use for longer stories though where its not just single paragraphs that are removed from the narrative flow.

no, they are essential, cuz they are innovative (im pretty sure i know what you did) its this kind of shit that makes your story stand out.

 

[didier91]

You sound set already, but feel free to send it to me at boromir700@hotmail.com for any extra advice if you want. I also do 4U English.

 

[Lukybear]

can send it to me as well, be glad to help

LukyTom92@gmail.com

 

[louise08]

Thanks so much everyone for your kindness!!
I feel MUCH better about my story now.


If anyone else is up to go over it, there is till time. The more advise it gets the better

 

[Shoom]

PM it to me .

 

[louise08]

Bump.

 

[MSELIM2]

yea sure why not, hehe just pm it,i could get my friend to look at it for you, she is good with these things and she loves it.

 

[untitled....]

Yeah, I'd like to read it too.
Just pm it

 

[jonobono8888]

Yeah I'm up for it. Send it over

 

[calopang]

Thanks I sent you a message.

Anyone else ?

I'd b happy to look at it
tcalopedos@gmail.com

 

[kwabon]

i would lov to look at it
kwabon@hotmail.com

 

[lisarh]

Care if I read it?
dreams_believer904@hotmail.com