BOS Showcase: 2009 Major Works (1 Viewer)

[marcquelle]

thanks the ending is my second favorite part. My favourite is bernies line "i don't swing that way buddy..." piss my self whenever i hear it I made my message tone lols

thanks for commenting on my piano playing ( i did all of it, on the day lols )

 

[alex.leon]

love it marquelle. i love the "you mean you must defecate?" thing and emotional guitar.

i loved the pope's contraceptive message and the crazy piano and all those wild screams...
and bra-burning garduation and the "boing" sound effect.

haha - simon says is best ending

crazy piano = awesome

 

[alex.leon]

I'm still reading it and the more i do, the more i love it!
I love the way you've set this out. My favourites are call the dictionary! plasticity has a new meaning, retail therapy: a recognised practice, because you can’t eat endorphins, buy - i just keep writing more as i read them. Ah and pop memorabilia, paparazzinazi, your children and your children's children. I just love them all - you'd better get a fantastic mark! haha

Somehow I missed this earlier.

Thankyou so much for your awesome feedback. I really hope I do well, the amount of hours that went into that thing...gah!

 

[six demon bag]

i shall post - theres a few things i dont like about mine though - let me know what you think

alex.leon, that's cool - poetry deserved it.

 

[marcquelle]

OMG so tranterisc. i thought the character was a man and then BAM a woman well done

I love your piece especially the pieces called: indifference, evolution and exorcism

 

[six demon bag]

Do you mean mine? I just realised I didn't specify gender till pretty late - woops. haha

 

[jacq093]

wow. i've skimmed through all of the ones on here and
WOW.
:jaw: Just amazing.

Congratulations on such fantastic works!

 

[marcquelle]

Do you mean mine? I just realised I didn't specify gender till pretty late - woops. haha

yes i do its awesome, you get your characters apathy through and how she despises people and situations its really good

 

[six demon bag]

thank you

 

[kaz1]

Read through some of the work. They seem pretty good although I'm not a very good English judge. Congratulations to everyone finsihing their major work.

 

[hereyes]

contemplating whether or not to post anything up...

but shall willingly post up my friend's MW. seeing as she doesn't have an acc.

Medium: Short Story
Title: [Insert your name here]

hope you enjoy it as much as I did.

i'll put mine up....
soon....
maybe tomorrow.
no, this isn't procrastination.

 

[Charlessunstrum]

I did EX2 but I'm a bit hesitant to post mine up. I just know someone will find some horrific spelling mistake. I'm usually just a lurker on here...

BUT, from reading some of the other compositions I reckon there's going to be a few E4s.

I read one of the poetry works; "quick fix, cheap thrill". I was a little indifferent at first but the diction and word choice was pretty wonderful. The author definitely has a very good economy of words.
eg:

"It’s funny when the word ‘buy’ / fits comfortably in your mouth. / Sits just right.

All round good job I think.

I might go and read a few more...

 

[accio.brain]

^^ skimmed over your friend's MW, i love it just from what i read!

 

[accio.brain]

On another note, 30 views and no comments??
That's never reassuring...

 

[Therewego]

ahhh come on someone comment on mine the suspense is killing me

good stuff/bad stuff/ indifference is all appreciated

 

[accio.brain]

Diametric: Really liked yours! I loved the concept and your writing style

 

[diametric]

thanks accio.
did you read the RS as well, cause thats the one im worried about? most people's seem a helluva lot better.

i started reading yours last night when i was already sleepy. ill finish it off tonight and get back to you.

 

[posey-rose]

I did EX2 but I'm a bit hesitant to post mine up. I just know someone will find some horrific spelling mistake. I'm usually just a lurker on here...

...

I'm a tad hesitant as well.
I refuse to reread mine incase i freak out about a massive mistake i know would be there.

at least it's one unit completely finished now right?

 

[accio.brain]

thanks accio.
did you read the RS as well, cause thats the one im worried about? most people's seem a helluva lot better.

i started reading yours last night when i was already sleepy. ill finish it off tonight and get back to you.

Just read your RS, it's pretty decent and account of your research/links with EE1 is good. It's minor but I would've moved a few commas around lol. I really like your last paragraph though! If for some reason they don't like it (though it's not as bad as that..), I reckon the last sentence is enough for them to think it's wonderful! =]

thanks, i'd like to know what someone thinks...

 

[marcquelle]

sorry accio.brain i thought i posted about yours last night lols i ended up putting it on facebook lols

i really your piece, especially the opening, its structure was really good and i liked how the dialogue flowed it seemed naturally but philospohical (if you get what i mean). Overall i think its a really strong piece, you should do well